A bit I did.. don;t ask me why. Just fgelt it inside and let it spill out onto the paper..



The Darkness inside



Darkness,
Enveloped desolation,
A world’s ruination,
No justification.

Labeled,
Ridiculed by the outside,
Harassed because of my ride,
No-one cares what’s inside.

Lost,
Falling ever more,
Feeling insecure,
Darkness claims me more.

Sorrow,
Sadness fills my soul,
No where left to go,
Hiding in my hole.

Strength,
It will not drag me down,
With my friends around,
Happiness I have found.

Darkness,
Darkness Is my maker,
With it I am safer,
God bless its creator.

I let a few otehrs read my work, I do not take pride in its creation, in fact I don't think its very good at all.. I believe I could do much better.. But Scorptrio talked me into posting it.. so if you hate it.. blaim him


Aubri Lycan, Out

I like the structure... how it givz xtra power 2 the 1st word n every stanza ... & I like the way that u brought it full circle from Darkness back 2 Darkness.

I think it was right of Scorptio to talk you into posting it.. I like it, it seems to reflect on alot of different issues that can be suited for a variety of different people..me myself included..

Obi-wan has taught you well.

I love the structure in this one. Almost a series of Haiku (not really Haiku, but I think you get what I mean) The images and form are right on the money. I was really impressed with the way this one came out. Don't do yourself down - it's worth sharing.

I think you should post in here more often.

Give us all a run for our money.