2 for Two

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Aubri Wolf
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2 for Two

Post by Aubri Wolf »

Yes I have a second one.. I decided to put them in 2 seperate post.. Why.. hell I don't know Im sick and twisted and wanted to give each and ever one of you parkinsons faster by making you have to click twice to view my work.. *evil laugh* Oh well, enjoy. or don't...



Pain inside.



My life bleeds out on to the floor,
I look at you, as if begging, no more,

Your face twist up in an evil grin,
You enjoy to taste my blood again.

My heart it opened, up to thee,
You promised you wouldn’t injure me.

Then pulled my heart out from my chest,
An laughed and watched me bleed to death.

Looking up, from the pool of red,
You have not killed me, I am not dead.

Your sadistic Nature, I now see.
Whenever that I think of thee.

Stronger now, thanks to this.,
Thanks to you, for being heartless.



Again if you don't like it, Blaim not I for My will was to keep it to myself.. EVIL MIND RAY, forcing me to do things I wish not.. Stupid jedi..

Aubri Lycan, Out!
Tohou ni kureta kinou ni sayonara (Goodbye to yesterday when I was confused.)
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Post by The Stormstress »

I rather njoyed it... very xpressive ov emotionz & good tranzition n2 ending... might wanna adapt a few wordingz 4 smoother flow, tho, IMO.
If u r such a vamp, then bite me, bitch! :twisted:
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Post by The_Lady_Aphrodite »

:twisted: once again (you go evil mind ray) thanks for sharing
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Aubri Wolf
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Thank you

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Someone at least saying that they think my work is good. Is an intesting change to what I had exspected..


()()(might wanna adapt a few wordingz 4 smoother flow, tho, IMO)()() <---> Thank you for the comment.. any suggestions can only make me bette in what I do..


Wow.. So cooll.. You like me.. you realy like me.(snif). well maybe not.. :D

Oh well off we go..

Aubry Lycan, Out.
Tohou ni kureta kinou ni sayonara (Goodbye to yesterday when I was confused.)
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Thanks for sharing - great stuff.

Post by Scorptrio »

You impressed me, bro. Glad you took my advice to post them up. Great images, good storytelling. Keep it up.
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Post by vicious_blood »

Wow, I liked that alot.

Hmm...I might have to print that one out, if you don't mind...?
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Sure

Post by Aubri Wolf »

If you auctually think its good enought to print out, by all means go ahead..

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