"Vulgar Kisses"

spookwhore · Post by **spookwhore** » Wed Oct 08, 2003 3:12 am

"Vulgar Kisses"
By: Trevor de Sade

Here in awe of the all abstract
Deep in the dust & blood between us
Comes the focus of a newborn god
Just to taste the vulgar kisses
The rusted mind of the conscience love
Still broken beyond it's limits
The sacred scars left by the cancer flow
Yet to be forgiven
Our stars united to shoot us down
Making new celestial bullet-holes
The hollow truth held in your eyes
Shows me the failures in the show
But here we lie so frail & nude
& here we lie forsaken
Here we lie to cut each other
& here we lie so broken
I'd strip away my only flesh
To let you tear me from within
I don't deserve to kill myself
So push the needles in my skin
The figure of that newborn god
Is all I'll ever need to be
So lie in the jagged gravel
Down in the dirt with me

jinx · Post by **jinx** » Fri Oct 10, 2003 11:58 pm

that's really fucking cool....thank you :-)

spookwhore · Post by **spookwhore** » Sat Oct 11, 2003 3:00 am

Thanx, it really means alot to me to have someone give me complement on some of my work, w/ no reason to piss in my pocket. I got the insperation & I was here so I just wrote it down here.

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vicious_blood · Post by **vicious_blood** » Wed Oct 29, 2003 10:00 am

I love that! You better make sure you get it copywriten cause it is really good.

Ok, now my poems seem stupid in comparison.

Yeah, I know I can't spell.

:-?

spookwhore · Post by **spookwhore** » Thu Oct 30, 2003 9:51 am

Yeah, I only copyright my songs. I have like about 5 poems copyrighted, but that's because they are published. I didn't copyright them, the publisher did. I've copyrighted just about all of my songs. ANyway, thanx for the compliment. I really appreciate that, though this is pretty much just scribblings compaired to most of my stuff. I'll let you read some of my other stuff, especially my songs, one day.

vicious_blood · Post by **vicious_blood** » Thu Oct 30, 2003 10:04 am

That would be awesome, dude!

I have a whole book full of poems but I don't like to post them that much cause 1) I don't want them stollen or even "borrowed" (yeah, I'm a bitch)...2) some of them are way too personal...3) I don't like getting flamed by people who think they know how to write or think they know ME.
I know that sounds mean but poetry is suppose to be about the authors dreams, angers or thoughts...so I don't understand how other people can flame other peoples work. If it doesn't sound good to them, that's fine. They apparently aren't feeling the same way the writer was when they wrote it...and I don't like people to tell me how I should or shouldn't feel.
Anyways, this is rambling...

I would like to see some more of your stuff, tho.

Watch me get flamed for this post.

spookwhore · Post by **spookwhore** » Mon Nov 10, 2003 12:56 am

Thanks kiddo,

I agree, if you don't like something, fuck yourself. Whatever. Just don't jump my nuts because you don't think it's up to your "standards". I've written better poetry on bar napkins, than most of the stuff that gets published, but you don't think that I'm gonna go how bad some amatuer's writting style is. I sucked when I first started writting. Then aGein, I was 13, so what do you expect. If someone "flames" you for what you write, tell 'em to go fuck themselves, tell them to check out this post, & tell them I send my regards. To all the people that are have nothing but, destructive critisism, fuck you. You are no better than anyone else, who put ideas on any media. It is all opinion!!!

vicious_blood · Post by **vicious_blood** » Mon Nov 10, 2003 9:17 am

spookwhore wrote:Thanks kiddo,

I agree, if you don't like something, fuck yourself. Whatever. Just don't jump my nuts because you don't think it's up to your "standards". I've written better poetry on bar napkins, than most of the stuff that gets published, but you don't think that I'm gonna go how bad some amatuer's writting style is. I sucked when I first started writting. Then aGein, I was 13, so what do you expect. If someone "flames" you for what you write, tell 'em to go fuck themselves, tell them to check out this post, & tell them I send my regards. To all the people that are have nothing but, destructive critisism, fuck you. You are no better than anyone else, who put ideas on any media. It is all opinion!!!

Yup...

Ok, so I'm actually glad you replied to one of my post cause for some reason I was thinking you were mad at me...
anyways...

I've been writing since I can remember and I don;t write very much cause I have to be motivated and I don't wanna write about just anything. So even if it's only a 2 line poem...it has alot of emotion behind it. And I hate when people flame my stuff, because I don;t see how they could possible understand the feelings that are in it. (did I say that already?)

minor threat sheep_rarrr · Mon Nov 10, 2003 2:47 pm

This is the first thing I've read of yours. I like it alot. It appartently has some deeper meaning that's left not to be completely understood and I love that, because that allows the reader to almost compare it to themselves in their own way, instead of something just being about love of the moon or about hating everything...

Very very nicely done. Awesome words. You write so that the reader can tell you care about what you're writing. I could take a lession from you.

I seem to write things just so they'll rhyme.

I look forward to reading much more from you!

~Willow

sapphirerose · Post by **sapphirerose** » Tue Nov 18, 2003 10:59 pm

very raw...
I like the rhythm in it
I can't wait to see more.

"Vulgar Kisses"

"Vulgar Kisses"

Wonderful

mmm...

"Vulgar Kisses"

"Vulgar Kisses"

*Wonderful*

mmm...

Wonderful